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"You don't regret the things you did
But the things you didn't do,"
Or so they say but I disagree,
For there is much I would undo.

A thousand regrets I've had in love,
A thousand more in life.
A thousand wasted, crumpled pens,
Uncapped, abandoned flight.

If only butterflies would form cocoons
To snuggle in its depths,
So out may crawl a lovely worm,
Made of living, limping wax.

I think, you think, we think "What if?"
Until it sizzles through our flesh,
I think, you think, we think "Should have-"
Till our lies are all undressed.

A thousand mistakes I've longed to change,
With a click, a stop - rewind.
If only hands could touch the soul -
But wait, you have touched mine.

A thousand recycled, duct taped ribs,
To hold my trembling heart.
A thousand birds from me to you,
From you to me - an arc.

"You don't regret the things you did
But the things you didn't do."
A thousand regrets I've had in life,

But I will never regret you.
It's been ages since I've submitted anything but here it is, finally!

If you're wondering why I've not been posting - it's because I've been happy. As you've probably noticed (if you've read any of my other works), I have an incredible capacity for depressing the unicorns out of you. It's almost supernatural.

So here it is, my first love poem! I think.

P.S. You're all a bunch of fluffy eggnogs and I'll eat you with a spoon!
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Shasta-Rose Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This is a really wonderful poem on so many levels. I love the rhythm, first of all, which feels natural and absolutely lovely. And then there's your opening - you take a common quote, and turn it around, making it the motif of your poem. It's very nicely organized as you bring us through many incredible, interesting, and diverse frames of thought.

The butterfly analogy was incredibly potent. I love how you talk about moving through time backwards like a butterfly undoing metamorphosis - implying that what's happened is so dramatic it's pronouncedly changed the narrator's life. The regrets are potent, so influential that we go from worm to butterfly, and there's no way to reverse the process. "Recycled, duct taped ribs" was also incredibly original, vivid, and apt.

Your repetition of "think" with different pronouns is incredibly effective. It shows the impact of what's happened to many people around us, and shows how we ALL have those moments we wish we could reverse. It's an interesting way to show retrospection and increases the importance of those hypothetical thoughts - until it "sizzles through our flesh," impacting us physically.

The ending. The ending. Is. Perfect.

Thank you for sharing this. It is a wonderful work!
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xTintedlullabyx Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Awwwwwwwww, thank you so much for your incredibly lovely comment, Rose! I made me smile from the North Pole to the South. Really, your comment made my day. I'm so glad you liked my poem! You're an incredible writer yourself. Your choice of words is always spot on and your imagery is vivid. I really appreciate such kind words from a fellow writer. I hope you'll have a fantastic day and many more to come :) Keep writing and thank you for your support!
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Shasta-Rose Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much too!!! Happy feels all around. Keep writing, look forward to more. :)
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KikuMizu Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012
Simply lovely.
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Fr3k0she Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Amazing. I really love this one. I can relate to it. It's truly awesome
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Satsuki-egaku Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2012   General Artist
This is great, I love when you write love poems ;)
You should do more of them, that's really beautiful <3
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xTintedlullabyx Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Aww, thank you, Satsu. I really should haha.
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Satsuki-egaku Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2012   General Artist
You're welcome ! :heart:
Fighting ! :D
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